My Creative classroom....
While others make themselves go crazy with some stupid science and maths, my creativity overflows ;)....
This is a product of an Inorganic lecture...:D
Yoon na milo karo tum humse kuch lamhon ke liye...
lamhen to beet jate hain, hum theher jate hain
Tum to aate ho, muskurate ho, chale jate ho
Aur hum kai ghanto tak fir khud ko talashte reh jate hain
kai bar lagta hai woh lamhe palak jhapakte hi beet gaye
Aur kai bar khud ko bas unhi lamhon mein jeeta pate hain
Aisa kya kiya that tumne, ki mujhko mujhise chura gaye
Hum to fir kai lamhon tak yahi sochte reh jate hain......!
This is a product of an Inorganic lecture...:D
Yoon na milo karo tum humse kuch lamhon ke liye...
lamhen to beet jate hain, hum theher jate hain
Tum to aate ho, muskurate ho, chale jate ho
Aur hum kai ghanto tak fir khud ko talashte reh jate hain
kai bar lagta hai woh lamhe palak jhapakte hi beet gaye
Aur kai bar khud ko bas unhi lamhon mein jeeta pate hain
Aisa kya kiya that tumne, ki mujhko mujhise chura gaye
Hum to fir kai lamhon tak yahi sochte reh jate hain......!
posted by Phoenix @ 11:42 AM
8 Comments:
At Wednesday, February 16, 2005 12:23:00 PM,
Ritesh said…
Very creative dear :)
|Haan thoda sa bouncer hai.... thoda sa.
At Wednesday, February 16, 2005 12:25:00 PM,
Phoenix said…
with regards the line...
|"kai bar lagta hai woh lamhe palak jhapakte hi beet gaye"
I've got a suggestion to change the palak jhapakte to something more elegant...ok how about
"kai bar lagta hai woh lamhe kshan bhar se bhi chhote the"
OR
"kai bar lagta hai woh lamhe hume chhone se pehle hi guzar gaye"
OR
"kai bar lagta hai woh waqt itna kam tha ki shayad tha hi nahi"
At Wednesday, February 16, 2005 12:33:00 PM,
Ritesh said…
Comments:
|1."kshan" doesnt go with a urduish poetry.
2. The last option "kai bar lagta hai woh waqt itna kam tha ki shayad tha hi nahi" doesnt go coz then the next line "Aur kai bar khud ko bas unhi lamhon mein jeeta pate hain" contains [u]lamhon[/u].
3. "kai bar lagta hai woh lamhe hume chhone se pehle hi guzar gaye" this one looks okay.. but maybe we can come up with something better...
At Wednesday, February 16, 2005 1:31:00 PM,
Phoenix said…
thanxxxxxxxxxxxx ritz...ok so its decided...finally the line needs to be changed to...
|" kai bar lagta hai woh lamhe khwabon mein hi mumkin hain
aur kai bar khud ko bas unhi lamhon mein jeeta pate hain.."
At Wednesday, February 16, 2005 6:26:00 PM,
Anonymous said…
kai bar lagta hai woh lamhe palak jhapakte hi beet gayeInorganic class bhi kabhi interesting hoti hai ? [:o]
|At Thursday, February 17, 2005 2:31:00 AM,
Ritesh said…
Yayee! Sounds perfect now!
|* Pats himself and obviously you *
[:D]
At Saturday, February 19, 2005 1:42:00 PM,
Naveen said…
sahi hai..
|keep it up..
mughe kavita nahin likhno aati..:(
At Tuesday, February 22, 2005 12:21:00 PM,
Phoenix said…
@peetah..
|of crse, suits studs like you...
@ Naveen..
It's ok...it's just like normal IIT guys...lack of imagination...hehe..;)
The war aint over buddy!!!:)
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